BCM325 | Peer Commentary & Evaluation


Here is my feedback for my peers beta presentations. My goal was to focus on the ideas, concepts and practicality of the proposed Digital Artefact, and I did my best to contribute to further research via web links, academic, scholarly and news media sources and other materials. Here is my critical self evaluation:

Comment 1: Steph Jory

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I was very fascinated with Steph’s Digital Artefact on the future of retail. In my comments I mentioned that her beta presentation was clear, easy to understand and I believed that she was right on task and heading in the right direction. Her digital artefact itself was very informative and she had really good information regarding the future of retail. Instead of giving her more information, since she had already completed two of her blog posts, I wanted to give guidance on ways she could share her information to the public. In her presentation she explained that she struggled to find feedback on her blogs. I did some research on some niche subreddits that she would be able to post in. The r/onlinebusiness one will definitely be of use to her as in my research I found that this space was used to discuss trends and give tips on utilising the online space. This will be helpful to her as these individuals are looking into the future of ecommerce marketing for businesses and may have some good feedback regarding her first two blog posts. In my research I also found an interesting trend report on future retail ecommerce trends. I unfortunately forgot to put this in my comment but made a second comment apologising with the link! Here it is for reference: click here. I failed in providing additional information to her based on the lecture materials but as I said, she was already finished her blog posts and giving her more information would not be useful to her in my opinion. I thought she did a really good job and I hope my advice on utilising reddit helped her for feedback.

Comment 2: Hussein Hijazi

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Unlike Steph, Hussein has not yet posted his blog posts for his digital artefact and was still looking into research for his project. I really liked his DA idea and thought that this would be a really nice guide for students who are struggling with the thought of their future post graduation. I recommended that he reaches out to students and past students to gains insight and second opinions which would nicely back up his research. I suggested that he uses reddit and twitter because these two platforms are great for creating discussions. Finding past UOW students as well would help keep his research to the Australian demographic. Amazingly, I found the single-greatest article that would back up his primary research so nicely. It was done by the Australian Council for Education Research who studied graduates education and employment outcomes 5 years after completing a bachelor degree at an Australian University. This ties into the future aspect of his digital artefact and I thought that he would be able to use this to then question why x amount of people start work straight away and how that ties in with the opinions and perspectives he finds from his primary research. I really hope this helps because I am quite excited for it! Again I could have also tied into our future cultures lecture material (I think I got too excited with the journal I found) and so in my third comment I made sure to mention it.

Comment 3: Elise Hallinan

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I really enjoyed watching Elise’s beta presentation. She had already created multiple blog posts which were all equally fascinating to read. I thought she was really good at implementing her feedback by adding photos and making her posts more engaging. Because she was creating so many blog posts, I thought it could be helpful to give her another topic that I believe is important for the art-world that also ties in nicely with our lecture materials and the future of technology. I wanted to mention our cyberspace topic by tying her project in with the use of virtual reality for the art world. I believe that it is just as important to discuss how we view art in the future and what that means for creators and artists themselves. I hope that this gave her a different perspective and also a different topic for one of her blogs making it tie in nicely with our lecture subjects. One thing I wish I added into my comment was a more detailed explanation on utilising social media websites to find feedback. I mentioned to use Pinterest, Reddit and Twitter but I should have explained how to use them to gain the best engagement. I hope that my comment helped her gain a new perspective!

Peer Pitches! – BCM325


Comment 1

Leo’s Pitch:

I really enjoyed Leo’s pitch on the rise of virtual reality! I was curious to know what type of virtual reality he would be focusing on and for what reasons. Virtual reality is definitely becoming a big part of our society as a whole but I would love to see Leo cut down his research and focus on one aspect, for example medical research or gaming. This will allow him to have a very clean and strong DA. I wish I supplied another article that would help him focus on the future of virtual reality and how that may consume our everyday lives in the future. I should have also touched upon his public utility. However, I do believe I gave him an incredibly interesting article which touched on immersive vs non-immersive virtual reality simulation experiences and I hope that this helps him with him research!

Comment 2

Jett’s Pitch

Jett’s pitch was incredibly interesting to me because his DA will be shown through the platform TikTok which I am an avid user of. As someone who uses it for her own business and also her digital artefact I wanted to give him insight on how to use the platform efficiently. I was reading the other comments by our peers and decided on focusing on the methodology part of his pitch as I didn’t really understand his goals for his DA and didn’t want to give him a useless academic source that has no relevance to his pitch. In saying that, I could have added by perspective anyway incase it helped, which I know I did not do sufficiently. Instead, I chose to ad an example of a popular Australian TikToker because she is well known for sharing her favourite Australian artists and therefore had a positive effect on her job as a Triple J employee. Jett stated that he wanted to use the platform to highlight his favourite songs of the week and I believe that she could be a really good inspiration for him. I hope that this helped him in understanding how to use the platform efficiently for his DA which none of the other comments did.

Comment 3

Franks Pitch:

I found Franks Pitch really interesting because he will ultimately be using this DA as a map for his 5 year career plan. His pitch made me realise that maybe I should be using my DA more as a plan for myself and the future career possibilities with my own business. I wanted to focus my comment on his 3rd blog post regarding his clothing brand. Although he said that is currently doesn’t not relate to his career plan in music journalism, he wanted to implement it somehow and adjust where necessary. As someone with her own clothing brand I wanted to offer some insight on how I believe he could utilise this. I mentioned that as long as the niche is in line with his work he could definitely use the brand as a way to traffic engaging followers and sales and will definitely be able to fuse them together. I wish I went into more detail about how he could do that and give him an example. I would have said that if he had his own website which included ‘merch’, and then implemented other social media platforms such a TikTok and Instagram he should be able to have success with this in the future. I also included a blog post that I quite enjoyed about how to be successful online if you have a business. I hope this helps him and I can’t wait to see how he actually implements it into his blog posts!